Descriptive Writing
The clouds in the sky create a nice cool blanket from the hot sun. I can smell the rain that was once falling. The sound from the cars and the people create a nice little harmony that one could easily lay down and relax to. Not too far off in the distance I see the old softball stadium. And scattered around the park are huge oak trees. I can also see the playground, and the muddy path that the runners take. Now, the clouds are breaking and shinning just a hint of sun into this wonderful picture. The temperature is one that is dreamed of on the hottest and the coldest days. It is not to hot, and it is definitely not to cold. This new sunlight seems to change the color of everything. The grass which was once a forest green has now turned into green. The trees which seemed dark at first, now actually resembles brown bark and green leaves. Even the metal fence that goes around the softball stadium has turned from grey into silver. There seems to be more movement now, and I hear a bird chirp every so often. The sun seems to be playing hide-and-go-seek with the clouds. I could definitely spend all day at this heavenly place.The clouds imprison the sun. The trees, in the breeze, shake like little k
I used three strategies for developing my positive and negative descriptions. By using personification I gave objects around the park human traits. Instead of trying to find a way to portray the temperature as negative in my negative description, I just omitted it. The reason is unknown, but I know that even on the darkest day a park seems to have a positive description to it. The playground, that once held the smiling faces of children, now too is as lonesome as an old widow. Figurative language is my last strategy. In my positive description I mention the temperature, "It is not too hot, and it is definitely not too cold," this gives the reader a sense that is the perfect temperature. The sound of the cars and people remind you of how busy the world is. Analysis For this writing project, I chose to write about Manhattan's city park. By setting the scene in the first sentence of each paragraph, I believe that it helps the reader paint a picture that will correspond to the description. This writing assignment also showed me that by using these strategies it makes it very easy to get both a positive and negative description out of one scene. In the first sentence of my positive description, I was able to set a positive view by using the words, "nice cool blanket from the hot sun," I believe that this paints a picture in the reader's head of a nice overcast day.
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