In Janet Lewis' "Girl Help"(173), it [faulty construction of sentence] seemed to be a pleasant poem about a young girl doing her part in chores for the home. As I read on, the sound of the poem was warm and enjoyable at the image of a child doing adult work. Towards the end of the poem, it shows [need to maintain consistency of verb tense] the satisfaction to know that there are more cleaning days to come. [I can't tell yet what your thesis statement is.]
             The poem sounds charming with the depiction of a young girl moving about a room. Her demeanor is mild and is [she moves] at a slow [needs comma] innocent pace. The poem's detail of the "stirs the summer dust" says that the girl is involved in some kind of sweeping chore. With the description of the "wide broom" gives the impression that the broom is too big for her to handle; yet she does what she can to make sure the job is done. In addition, this stanza gives an example of end rhyme with the use of "room" and "broom." The next stanza gives the atmosphere of temperate air to reiterate that it is in the summer days. It describes her "soft lips together pressed" that shows facial expression on her concentration of the chore. "Soft" is then used again to describe her hair. This gives the mood of just the gentleness of a child, along with a person able to witness the innocence of children while they do their everyday activities. There is an example of end rhyme in this stanza with the use of "pressed" and "rest." Then she rests after her simple task starts to overwhelm her. Then the poem shows assonance and alliteration at the line "amid the summer hum", [comma goes inside quotation mark] in that is uses the repetition of vowels [alliteration is repetition of vowel sounds. You need to specify both since you mentioned them in your previous clause.] . Althou...